And yes, the tune...The meter is fine, but I want someone to suggest a tune...
It's a rock kinda song, more bass and a bit of drums with a touch of percussions and rhythm guitar...just imagine them as you read the song... :D
The song is called Cold
now is the time
to cross the line
to find the place that u wanna be
so be prepared
to be paraded
by the bad things that keep u away
(chorus)
let's keep an eye on the things we cry (for)
and try to get what we've been denied
x2
this was the time
to take what's mine
to keep them all from stripping me
'tis but a crime
another rain
to leave this heart wailing for glee
chorusx2
that was the one that keeps me going
the one that makes me going on...
and then the dice that never rolled
calls me to you and keeps me cold....
this is my first song, so there might be little problems with the metre and rhyme, but please tell me how it was...!!
P.S.: Keep the abuse in the comments to a low, or atleast try to... :P :P
